My name is Kevin D. Bandt, I graduated last year with my BFA last year with high hopes of becoming an artist in a game studio. Crappily, It hasn't happened yet but I keep my hopes up and my pencil scratching away at the paper. Without experience (and with so many highly experienced painters looking for work at the same time) my chances of getting work seemed to be dwindling. Eventually, I figured I might as well hire myself. So I began working on a comic book. This comic is simply (for the time being) for my own amusement and creative happiness. I will be turning it into an ongoing webcomic in the near future so if you see something you like pm me and I will keep you posted on my progress.
1. To my eye, almost every single panel has waaay too much empty space. I'd really think more carefully about the way the panels are cropped. (Personally, the few times I've tried to do comics, I've actually penciled the individual panel-scenes on separate sheets of paper so I could compose the page in Photoshop for maximum impact. But then, I sort of suck at drawing.)
2. I think, for now, you should either completely render the panels, or take the traditional approach of having an inked black line that's filled with more-or-less flat color. I'm not crazy about the hybrid drawn/rendered style you're using.
3. Overall the pages tend to be a bit flat, value-wise. It might be a good idea to remember to always separate foreground from background with a major shift in value. The last couple pages in the bar would probably work better if the background wasn't the same mid-range brown in every panel—either a darker or lighter background will help to emphasize the figures more.
thanks giacomo- I think I left so much space because I was afraid of getting trapped later with no space for word balloons. as I get more comfortable with doing comics this way I will try to work the kinks out. As for your second point, I'm not planning on throwing out my painterly style. It is continually being refined and I feel like I am moving in a good direction. I agree about the value shifting. I have had this long running debate in my head as to whether I should do full value in black and white before going to color. However, I worry that I would loose some of the vibrancy of my colors...
oh and here is Obama giving his best Palin impersonation=