Hi i am total new to both traditional art and corel painter
i am trying to better my skills and would love some possitive feedback so her goes
the image can be seen here i just need to know if im on right tracks with it
the clouds are nicely rendered but i felt like i was waiting for the rest of the picture to load.
Exactly what I thought, also look at this thread- http://conceptart.org/forums/showthread.php?t=28184Originally Posted by oven g love
Sure, you seem to be doing nicely enough with the clouds. Lay off the seizure inducing highlighting though, it might lend to a certain level of surrealnes, but right now it just seems like the piece is trying too hard.
If that is supposed to be a cliff side, it's much too soft and shiny. Sharpen and angle its edges, also add more contrast(make darker) to that area of the piece and maybe in sellect areas of the clouds
Is there anything in particular you want me to focus on?
Too true. That might also be due to the overwhelming black below the pic, but nonetheless, it does seem as though it's a sudden cut-off.Originally Posted by oven g love
well thanks alot for feedback maybye if anyone can tell me what to do about the sudden cut off i would be greatfulll
first try to figure it out yourself, don't get lazy, and then we'll pitch in with suggestions. Conceptual art is 50% problem solving.
its more about i dont understand the tequniques required and i would like some help if thats ok ? like tips
Try extending the canvas down, or, get rid of the super strong shine on the bottom right of the piece, it guides the eye out of the picture. Darken the lower plane some bit,
These are all usggestions, I'm not sure just how succesfull they'll be until you attempt them. Good luck.
cheers thanks thats more like it .. many thanks dude im on it
do post an update when you've done reworking it. Let's see if it works out.
this is great advice please more would be great from diffrent people also
BTW welcome to CA flyingzenmonkey
What is the idea behind this painting ?
What are you trying to convey/achieve with this ?
I would be tempted to cut off the dark grey cloud at the right side.
Agree absolutly with what oven g love said ..& all those agreeing on this matter
It feels to me like a cutout from a a lot bigger piece - maybe a landscape with sky & clouds .
hi please check link for update on rock material and please offer any sugestions to helpo me improve
this for me is a technical excersise rather thatn conveying etory at present ( gota walk before i can run )
I'll be a bit more specific. Aside from the cut off, the coluds are very well done. What troubles me is that my eye is drawn to those nice clouds. in particular, the top center. Then, eventually I notice the grey cucumber thing that has the craters ( one of which is oozing something ) and the guy with the purple cape precariously placed on a bulge of some sort (how did he get there, what is he holding that's so bright and why is that squirel with him? ) Why does the top of the cucumber glow? Why is the [sun] reflecting off of the ships from the right and still is able to illuminate the clouds from the left? Many troubling things to ponder. Nice clouds though..........
thanks but as u know u gota start somehere u cat all be ryan church
maybye people can help me rather than pointing only what neesds to be done give soloutions rather than pointing issues out , i am the first to know it is not up to scratch but i want it to be
pointing out what needs to be done, is help. You weren't being criticized, every suggestion here was pointing out something that your piece seemed to lack, in the opinion of those who responded. If people didn't want to help, they wouldn't respond at all. This isn't Depthcore.