Hi all and Happy Christmas!
I'm just about finished with this one, but thought I'd see what advice the CA cadre might offer to improve it before calling it done. I'm also thinking about using a bit of spot color with it, as in the second version. I'd appreciate any thoughts you have, as direct as you like.
I love the expressiveness of the feet even though that ankle is a bit mashed up. Slightly worried about the white space of the tip of the wing against the cat's face.; you have the outline there slightly faded, but nothing else. Not sure who's going to come off worst in this encounter as that's no innocent fairy.
Thanks! I'll see what I can do about the ankle and the wing. It should be semi-transparent, so I'll have to figure out how to make that work. It does look a little off, though, I agree. Personally, I think the kitty is in trouble and just doesn't know it yet.
charming picture, i like the idea and the story behind it. general composition works imo.
what doesnt work for me is the hatching in some areas, and from visiting your sketchbook, i know you generally do better than that. the rectangular shapes created in the background by it, keep attracting my attention, creating a focus where there shouldnt be one. this hurts a picture alot. causes some restlessness in me, resulting in feeling uncomfortable and in turn annoyed.
next bad focuses are the plastic wrap in the foreground (which imo adds nothing to neither the story nor the image), the black heap under the tree, and the tree trunk (by its eleborate (comparatifely) and equal texture).
the hatching imo works really well on the cat, and is decent on the figure in general.
ive seen not one picture in your sketchbook that had such iritating texture. surprisingly almost no cross-hatching at all, and to me crosshatching (except for texture, the rectangular one, diamond shapes are less critical) in ink, is like (tube)black in painting... use it if its needed, but treat it with caution. and by rule of thumb, avoid it (unless you know how to use it, balancing its drawbacks).
another thing i dont like is the lens distortion in the foreground. our perception doesnt work like that, we re pulled out, made aware of just beeing a beholder. your story is good, dont ruin it by raising barriers between it and us .
a minor thing is the crack... its too mushy.
hope it helps, i like big parts of it . and you may already know that but im getting a boner everytime i see it: lots of inks by n.c. wyeth
sone_one: Thanks for a lot of good stuff to think about. Most of it is too late for the inked version of this, but will be very useful if I turn this into a painting. Thanks also for the link to Wyeth and looking through my SB.
In retrospect, I do wish I'd gone with a half-tone of some sort to push the background further back. The effect I was going for is something like Carla Speed McNeil does in a lot of her work on Finder. For example: http://cdn.uproxx.com/wp-content/upl...sfloorplan.jpg However, I have a lot of practice to do before I can handle the hatching like that.
Here are some small adjustments, and I'm calling it done until I take it digital.