I'd been staring at this for so long I can't figure out what is bothering me. Some background- it's a illustration of my son running with a forced perspective . Still underpainting.. The background and balloons are mostly roughed in right now as I'm still figuring a lot of that out. I know for one, the hand holding the popsicle is to big...but something is still off... Maybe I need to restart..
Would love some help.
It's a little hard to see -- rule of thumb is to size it down so it'll all fit on a typical computer screen without scrolling -- but it looks to me like it's coming along well. You've got the tough part of the foreshortening working, including the difficult nearside foot.
The wrinkles in his pants on his left thigh make it look like there's something sharp like a shin there. Also, the right arm needs a little work. Upper arm isn't as fully realized as it could be, and the bulging sleeve of his forearm will look all Popeye if you don't render the fabric carefully.
His face is correct, provided his head is tilted down in our direction. That's a tough call. For the mood of the piece, you'd would want him looking up (joyously into the sky and all that) -- but, man, I hate the look of that whole up-the-nose angle. It's damned hard and it often just doesn't look good.
Have you got reference?
I was once on the receiving end of a critique so savagely nasty, I marched straight out of class to the office and changed my major (sketchbook).
The subject in the picture is my son, but I couldn't get that sort of forced perspective in the actual photograph so I had to figure it out on paper. I wanted his foot really coming at you. I've also reworked his facial expression from what was taken. The tough part is the lighting. The light in the pic is coming straight at him... where as in my illustration it is coming from a high angle almost above him so I had to experiment there also. The overall composition bothers me a bit. Maybe the ballons should be more scattered, but the shape makes the viewer look to the right upper corner.
I really like how you did the perspective in this picture! The foreshortening in the arm holding the popsicle is really nice looking too.
I'd say a possible problem in this picture is that there isn't much contrast between the various shades of grey (i'm sure there's a more technical wording for this but i can't remember it ahah) which makes the picture appear somewhat muddy and a bit too dark.
Even if this is just a start for a picture, i'd suggest making the darker areas darker and the lighter areas much lighter, as to differentiate between shades to begin with. I think the highlights of the balloons and the ice creams would be very bright.
I agree with you that the balloons should be maybe either more scattered (you could make a couple of them flying away to give movement and push on the perspective even more for example)
One last thing: i'm having a bit of trouble figuring how his right leg works. As in, it sorta looks like the calf starts out too high based on where the knee should be, but at the same time that lighter shape just below it is throwing me off so i can't understand where the leg actually is :'D
I hope this was helpful! I'm very new at giving critique, so i hope i wasn't too harsh.
the value on the skin is generally way to dark, the local value of a darkshirt and a face are very different...
then there's the shadows, are not compleetly rightly placed
excuse the rough hand I only have a mouse to workwith at the moment
anyway I hope it helps
The perspective of the head is wonky. His head is facing up to our left, but the face is facing the other way. Tried to liquify a bit:
The foreshortening of both arms and the torso is off and everything is too dark.
All, thanks again for your advice.. its really greatly appreciated.
@Incinerated: The lighting your suggesting makes more sense especially on the face and I will adjust.
I know it is still early in this painting, but I feel like the whole thing lacks style.. Should I not worry about this and just keep working the way I do or any suggestions about style in general?
Thanks all for the suggestions. I do need to lighten alot of the values in the pic.
@Karmazon- Should the arms be forshortened more or less?