just one of of those, I'll just keep going with it. But i'm going color it too!
The bricks overpower the composition. A lot. It doesnt help that the bricks are very flat, also.
I know it's a work in progress, but definitely dull down the bricks. They are way too bright, and the contrast between those and the pure black makes my eye go there every time.
I darken the back but im going to put more detail in it. I already started to color it, i'll post that soon.
a better one, sorry
It might be changing the idea a bit, but it might be cool to have this a view from inside a window (car, van, house) looking out. That way you could add a bit of bebop's tongue drag and slime tracing along the glass.
Other than that, you have conflicting light source. I would choose a point a bit higher and off to the right. That will allow you more room for fill light to illuminate the dark side and give more depth and believability to the scene.
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