perfect shorinji i like that alot only to add would e give purpose to the lights on the hands to me that just look like glowing holes or something by that i mean t hey just look oddly placed
this isnt very updated the 1st one ive cleaned but i narrowed it down to these 2 im sorry that im so behind i was on strict bed rest since n=my last couple of posts but after the line work i flesh things out pretty quickly
penciltipred: No worries, I hope you're on the mend! I still think I like the bug like one a little more. Mind if the rest of us play around with these designs to see if we can flush them out a little more?
naw im cool do whatever was i was thinking maybe re-do it actually so it syncs more with the character
so they come together instead of 2 separate designs
Of course, i just drew a generic figure as base. Wouln´t strand from the agreed design
I forgot to add, i like the overpaint touches on the character, i think that vest looks more fitting.
Btw, this little tool is a real help if you guys are on PS and need to do the lineart.
P.S. I have working internet now. Crisis averted
Last edited by JDSart; August 10th, 2012 at 05:31 PM.
JDSart I'm glad your still with us in the internet world!
We have about 2 weeks now. The time has come to start pushing this more. I'm not too sure we still have all of our members?.. 2weeks without any site activity according to the profile... You still with us?.. I hope so cause I liked the thumbnails.
Ok. So I've been thinking a bit about the plot for the comic. I'm still a bit unsure about what kind of creature we're going for? I'm thinking the creature could be some kind of beast that is a steed or trusted companion for the guardian, that helps get him out of a scrap or two occasionally. I think this would work well with the suggested designs.
Also. How long do we want to make the pages? Is a week enough? Just so I know how soon the script should be ready.
A week is fine for me. I intend to be done with the enviroment by next week. The creature is a power source but they're rare and dangerous. I'm thinking big like an elephant, but sleek like a jaguar. It is a noble predator that is admired.
One thing though, when you write the script think big. Pretend that after the competition is over that comic would continue. You never know it might we might want to do more later.
I tried noodling around with a creature concept. Since tobbA mentioned riding the creature, I went more horse like.
Creature looks good. I'm thinking it might be a bit more "glowy" so to speak. Perhaps the lines on its skin could actually be shining? Just to show that it has a great power inside. Right now the story that I have in mind doesn't contain any riding, though. So as far as that goes it's kind of optional. I'm also going to plan the comic for four pages, unless Hekatonchier shows up last minute now...
I think this is the final character Sorry if I didn't follow the suggestions that closely, but I felt like this was more in line with the design I had in mind...
tobbA: I like the high gloss look on his equipment! I don't blame you for staying true to your initial vision. It came out looking pretty good. Though I think adding a bit of shadow under him would enhance your presentation.
ROLL CALL TIME
I have to say that I'm starting to get concerned about making the deadline. How many members are still with us? Anyone who hasn't checked in by next week will be assumed to have dropped out. The remaining members will then re-evaluate how to proceed.
I´ve given it some time to see whats the final look of each element, but there´s no more delaying it, i´m going with what there is on the thread as of today.
I think its kinda safe to assume by now that we are left to 4 members?
So, idea sketch for the illu.
Escaping or fighting the way trough soldiers in an alley in the outer slums, with the Zigurath homeland in the far background.
There could be rebels following behind him, and a couple soldiers in the front plane just
The main character figure could be backlit by an helicopter light like police chases, and i could add some propaganda posters in the walls as detail. And i think fitting it all into a spiral composition could work well
JDSart: Yeah! I like the basic idea you've got there. The composition is interesting in the thumbnail. Some of the poses need a little tweaking, but good references will fix that. We don't have a lot of time right now, so focus on the illustration and don't worry about doing a panels page. Just make this rock! Since you created the logo do you want to set the design presentation standard?
Penciltipred: Are you still with us for the creature design sheet?.. or do I need to finish it up? I understand if you can't continue with this due to health reasons, but if you're able we still want you with us!
im straight guys bullshits been happening but im good now i was sketching tiger ideas iill branch from your sketch and clean it up and it should be done by uhhhhh Tuesday at the latest my class is over so i got free time out my ass
Yeah. I'm thinking I'll probably just do a fairly simple character sheet to go with the character illustration in the end.
I like the idea with the illustration. But I think you should consider the "action lines" of the composition. Make everything (the lines of the perspective/enviroment) emphasize the action. Sort of like this:
Here I tried to make the presentation a bit more interesting... Silly me ended up merging all my layers, including the bg.
Aand here's the finished script.
this what i was able to produce this morning
Everything looks good guys.
I've been working on page one of the panels. I'll post a progress soon.
Ok. So do we just split the pages between the four of us at random? Also, wouldn't mind some feedback on the script
I should probably explain the story a bit more as well. I made up a new character. She's the daughter of the emperor, but also a genetic experiment to breed a human being with telekinetic as well as telepathic powers. The government is keeping the fact that the creature(s) they use for power generation are actually sentient telepathic beings secret. But the creature is able to communicate with the emperors daughter. And she wants to help it. When Jezal, who's deserted the empires army because he didn't want fight for a cause he knew was wrong anymore, is taken prisoner and scheduled to be executed she helps him escape. She guides him to the power suit, and then makes him free her as well. (Because she's the typical storybook princess looked up in her room, yada yada... ) Then they go together to free the beast from the power facility.
I actually wrote some feedback on the script the other day after you posted it, but when I hit the send button I got an error message and lost it all. I found out that my 2yr old son had unplugged the internet. I guess I got lazy after that... sorry.
The script looks good to me. The only question I had, I believe you just answered. I like the story taking place in the prison. Also it is logical how he is chosen to become the guardian. I like that it is not due to anything special about him, but rather his proximity to the princess and the desperateness of his situation.
As for which pages we do. I actually was doing some basic concept sketching for all of the pages, but when I went back to start refining my concepts, I got caught up in the details on the first page.
is this the direction we want
Penciltipred: Looking good. I think you're close. The design you have has a lot of potential, but since you and JDSart have to work at the same time, try to achive as much design agreement with his version as you can as you render this out.
I liked the sort of horse + tiger mix idea, it reminded me of a Kirin which i think fits well as a riding summon or something like that. And thats the train of thought i went with and adjusted the head a bit to llok more like a chinese dragon.
A wip with colors.
Last edited by JDSart; August 19th, 2012 at 10:25 PM.
JDSart: Looking pretty cool!
Here's my rough for page 1.
how do you want come to a consensus on the creature
the horse panther idea ia interesting but adding hooves to my design and from the basis of your design the has to be re configured, the head is fine but the body has to be brought out a bit different the legs are too short to be a functional animal with hooves the speed of it would be that of a pony(sorry if the term seems insulting to your design but basically a small horse)
Deadline is sunday right?
I´m trying to finish working on this tonight and tomorrow to see if i can do my page on friday.
I haven´t dismissed the advice with the comp. its justs way way easier to grab and rotate/resize and do adjustments in that aspect when is all rendered, and still theres a few elements to add in. Like pipes, maybe cable posts, some garbage
As for the hooves, with the smoke and if i add the figure in the foreground those wont be showing in my picture.
Last edited by JDSart; August 22nd, 2012 at 08:29 PM.
i understand,watcha mean ill work further o the creature and be done before the deadline to pitch in on the other places where i can