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This is a work in progress, sorry i took this pic with my phone off my computer
Why on earth did you use your phone to take a photo of this? Why not just save it as a jpg or screenshot it?
So... you know how to take a phone photo, then transfer it to the computer, and then upload it online.
But you don't know how to hit File, Save As?
You are literally insane.
Lol, actually my internet wasnt working at home this morning for some reason, so i snapped a pic with my phone and uploaded it here at work.................but besides the phone pic critisism what do you think of the drawing itself??
Aside from anatomy issues, some of your figures reactions don't make sense. For instance, the guy with the spear (ill assume you didnt pose with a broom handle for this) is holding it sort of like someone who is going to throw it, but his form is really compacted, and he is too close to the subject to throw it anyway. I can't tell what the guy on the left is doing, it looks like he is polevaulting. Look at this Frazetta piece. Study it. Look at the way the figures intertwine, but make sense within the context of the scene.
Please post a better version of this, And work on your anatomy studies
Thanks LAG!! Thats the critique i was looking for!! I'll fix the problems you've stated and post my progress, thank you!
Not a problem. Like I said though, pay special attention to your anatomy, it needs work.
Hey, actually like the middle guys expression. There's a foundation for something expressive there. However, I think you should strive to not use such a soft brush. It makes everything very fluffy and cheap/airbrushy looking. Also his very straight left arm does not look like it is a part of his body/pose. It kind of has another direction. try and find or do some reference for a guy trying to cut or swing a weapon, and see what the arm does. Unless he is applying force to something or someone below him, I doubt that he would position his arm like that.
I wasnt really happy how things were going with the first pic so i started with a new sketch, what does everyone think so far?? comments PLEASE!! (i know my anatomy isnt perfect, i draw from imagination, i am getting better though, when i use reference i just end up copying what i see, this is just how i learn)
Draw from imagination first, yes, to get the picture in your head onto paper. Then use detailed reference to correct your mistakes. Otherwise you will be learning far more slowly than you have to :-)
As an aside, I'm not sold on the scared soldiers - they are soldiers after all - if you look at Frazetta's they are either fighting or dead - but not running away.
I guess thats true about the scared soldier, (when i was sketching this i was remembering the soldiers running away on the movie 300) but aside from that is the setup of this pick better than the first?????
My biggest issue with the scared soldier right now is he's pulling the viewers attention away from the action. If you want him to be a yellow-belly perhaps having him closer to the viewer, running away but looking back over his shoulder at what is happening you could capture the same feel you wanted (and he could help lead the viewer into the action instead of away from it).
derekdedgell- ah good advice, i see what your saying
Pavel Sokov- I wish more than anything for the day i can spend all my time on my artwork, but I am currently a 23 year old business owner, and most of my time is spent trying to keep food on the table.....so unfortunately until the day i am a professional artist my updates will be slow
Finally updating, trying to add color, (I hate this part) ADVICE NEEDED!!
well I will say , your composition is dynamic. has DOF [focus on the central character], it has content [story your image tells]. SO I will say its perfect when it comes to a representation of Ideas.
when it comes to art:
its lacks reality in terms of rendering (colorings and lighting).
Anatomy wise I will say you were [6to7]/10.
Its my personal belief that anatomy doesn't matter unless the crafted anatomy looks convincing. In the case of your picture anatomy looks convincing (that is dynamics is correct but not the feature that could add realism)but not detailed.
I really liked the idea, said by someone for your case that you should draw first and then add the reality by observing references.
If this is as far as you can take the drawing as far as color is concerned, then you need to start studying color theory and painting from life.
Before you even get to this stage though, you should have some thumbnails showing the general colors you want to use and where you want them.
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Aonegamer- THANKYOU!! I love good critiques, I agree with everything you said. Color is driving me nuts, I guess im going to have to suck it up and get some references, lol.
bish0p2004- You are right, I've actually NEVER painted from life, and that is practice that I really need, along with thumbnails...I tend to forget about the rules and dive in, lol, thanks!!
Still need to touch things up, wanting to know if im going in the right direction before going any further....
IMO, there's too much black and too much white, and the color is too saturated. I like your previous version better.
Your paint application is too soft. I make this mistake ALL the time, so I know it when I see it, lol.
Choose a hard round brush and just start laying down big thick brush strokes of paint. Make the digital paint sit on top of your "paper". You'll be much happier.
Other than that, good job, keep chugging along.
-I often post from my phone; so please excuse the typosSketchbook
Syle- yea i have a big problem with using too many soft brushes, i think its because im used to drawing and not painting, ill try with harder brushes.
Also, for what it's worth, I think your first image has been the best so far. Just correct some of the minor problems that were noted in the first few posts, and you should have a pretty rocking tribute to Frazetta.
Honestly, that facial expression and action pose of your hero in the first image is pure tits. I love it.
-I often post from my phone; so please excuse the typosSketchbook
I'm no color guru, not in the least, but I definitely feel the line art packed so much more punch than the colored versions I'm seeing.
If I had anything constructive to offer, I'd certainly give you something.
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The usual staples for anatomy: