From my webcomic, Naked Chick Avenger on Drunk Duck.net
Hope you like it.
From an anatomical standpoint, there's a lot of visual confusion. The female appears to have five fingers and a thumb, rather than four fingers and a thumb. Her left breast appears to be larger than the right. Judging from the crotch and the shading you've done, the bottom of the ribcage and the top of the hips (the iliac crest) are almost right on top of each other. Her left upper arm is much, much longer than it should be - and certainly longer than her other arm.
There are some awkward tangents with the sword, not only at the line of her leg but it appears to be disappearing into the man's beard? Her hair doesn't really read as hair - and the male's beard suffers from the same treatment. The coloring is haphazard. I'm not sure what's going on in the background. Does the male character have arms? Where is his neck? Is he standing in a ditch??
Overall the execution isn't very good. Is there a reason why you aren't using a more simplified design?
Just wanted to throw it in here, while I can.
It is not unusual or anatomically incorrect to have one breast smaller than the other.
His neck is behind his giant beard, BUT I do agree with you.
It got a lot of flaws all over the place, but you got to start somewhere, right?
I'm sure I did and I've got plenty (plenty) to go before I can even dream of a job.
Keep on drawing, I hope you can improve even more so we can see more short comics!