Queen and King of the elves, from Shakespeare's Midsummer Night's Dream. They're having a fight, as usual. I want them to look proud and intense and there should be (somewhat sexual) tension between them.
I'm really excited about this piece, and I want it to be really good. Any critiques are welcome! Especially anatomy crits... I don't know much about anatomy so I just go with what feels right. -__-
I will add more bling later... crowns, etc. I haven't thought about it too much, so any suggestions would be great.
Overall I like it but considering the poses and their spacial relationship to each other it looks more like he's checking the back of her head for fleas and ticks instead of an intense eye locking gaze. Since he is clearly behind her I think we should see more of the front of his face and less of a straight up side shot. I think the poses are really working though and really give the intensity you are looking for.
THANK YOU. Haha you're totally right I didn't notice that. I will fix that now...
Hmm I tried to turn his head more forward, but it still seems that he's looking at the back of her head. Thoughts? Suggestions?
No I think you got it. It looks like she is walking away and they won't be making eye contact but for a moment longer, but it looks like they're eye-to-eye to me in your image.
mess around with the crop some more. It seems pretty tight.
Finally, look for some reference for both of them. I looked up 'woman turning head' and found a few useful images. Just make sure her head isnt spinning around too far. It really should only go as far as looking sideways. So what I would suggest is making it look sideways, which means just a tiny bit of her other eye might show, but they can still be in the last moment of eye contact, if she is turning her eyeballs back at him.
Good luck hehe
Last edited by Artfix; January 3rd, 2011 at 07:26 PM.
I feel like you've kind of crammed them into a tiny space. Expand your canvas a bit so you don't have awkward tangents like his elbow with the edge of your picture, and on the other side, her hand getting chopped in half and his fingertips touching the edge. And, I guess while I'm on odd tangents, I don't like how the trunk of the left most tree follows the line of his thigh. And his elbow just touches that tree as well. And the branch touches his shoulder. And on the tree on the opposite side, the way you have it curve in where his hand is and then bulge out, it looks like the tree is made out of foam or something and he's pushing on it. Honestly, you could just get rid of those trees. Or at least move them farther away from your characters.
Naw, I like the cramped space, and I think you fixed him up really good, but I think now she's the problem.
Have you ever lived in a cheap rundown apartment complex? Small hallways, cramped spaces...There's that one couple, you know, the diva woman with her punk ass boyfriend. You know the ones that the police sometimes show up because of 'domestic disputes'. That's the vibe I get here. I want him to be saying, 'Get your ass back here!', and grabbing at her, and she's pulling her arm away yelling 'Get the f**k off me or I'll cut your balls off!'.
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Hahahah thank you Truepinkas for the analogy. Everyone's given really great feedback. I'm thinking of reworking both characters though. I want direct-confrontational-aggression from both sides, like forehead-to-forehead-imma-burn-through-your-skull-with-my-stare kinda thing, not so much get-back-here-bitch. Know what I mean?