Mainly looking for tips on improving the figure but anything else standing out as wrong please let me know.
Last edited by Andrew Ryan; August 4th, 2010 at 12:17 PM. Reason: fixing
The right side of the canvas feels really heavy. Dragon, dragon fire, and guy with shield are all in a relatively small area on the canvas.
I understand showing the castle- but wouldn't the castle still show if the dragon were looking towards the (our) left side of the canvas and blowing fire at the knight over there? In that way you'd have an interesting triangle and could allow the fire trail to point up to the castle. We'd go dragon, knight, castle, back to dragon.
Keep the viewer in the entire composition, not a small amount of the composition.
Having the wing cut off like that is rather annoying.
Compositionally this is a miss. My eye follows the line of flame from dragon to knight along cure to......nothing. Eventually it goes up the side follows the curve in the path up the wing back to the dragon. The castle isn't even looked at much thus like Quigleyer pointed out, attention is concentrated on lower right area wasting much of the canvas space. Could crop the whole top off and lose nothing. Try playing with abstract shapes and lines to get a better composition then continue from there.
EDIT: Having realized the gravity of the compositional mistake I made an attempt to fix it.
That's a great difference in the effect you create! Definitely a lot more balanced. It looks more "epic" now, but it also loses a bit of the immediacy of the first version, where it was just the viewer and the two combatants, a lot closer. You might try to get back a bit of that idea by arranging the other fighters in the foreground so that you have some closer to the viewer, breaking up the composition and drawing the viewer in more.
Yeah- agreed. The only thing cooler than seven guys against a dragon is fifteen guys against a dragon. As mentioned by GoldSeven this would give you more of a chance to create interest by giving you a much MUCH needed foreground element.
Thanks for the feedback and I love your work Jenny.