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I need some fresh pair of eyes for help. I feel there are still a lot of problems with this, but can't see them or know how to fix them, mostly anatomical and perspective-wise.
Critique armor on...so have at it!
Last edited by syngeist; August 26th, 2010 at 10:12 PM.
Her left eye is not in line with the rest of her face and gap between her boobs is too big. You've got a nice expression on her and the water effect just needs tidying up.
Yeah, half agreeing with the previous comment. I have seen breasts like those with some bras out there, but it does detract from the image. Nonetheless, I do find the expression interesting. Now, this is partly because I just watched the official video for Tom Jones and Cerys Matthews singing "Baby, It's Cold Outside", and partly because of my upbringing, but, siren or no, I can, for some bizarre reason, imagine her next utterance as:
Don't take that as a criticism, just shows she's a friendly lass!
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This looks more like an every day girl (hairstyle, makeup, plucked eyebrows, bikini top) that's taking a dip in the water than a fantasy/natural siren, but maybe you wanted it to look that way?
Her left shoulder looks like it extends too far to me for the viewing angle that you have the rest of her body.
I like the slight effect you have going on her face so far with the light reflecting from below off the water. I hope you carry that on with the rest of her, such as under her chin, etc.
I'm sure there are better examples out there, but I found this one of a bird which can give you an idea for how to deal with the reflected light:
Thanks Black Spot, Darkwolf, and Wooblood. Good call on the eye, breasts, and shoulder. I plucked away at it some more and hopefully fixed up the issues. Still trying to figure out how to render hair in/on water and water itself. If you still see glaring issues or have a suggestion on how I should render certain areas please feel free to chime in.
As for the Water Siren...it's not initially supposed to represent a mythical creature, it's just kind of the code name for the project til I come up with a better one.
The original suit top and shape of the hair worked better compositionally.
She's still super cockeyed, and her mouth is a little crooked. Flop the image, it will hit you in the face and you'll wonder how you didn't see it.
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Thanks Elwell. I agree, the new hair and suit started to draw the viewer down and off the page. I tried to change the hair so it reflected the original pic more as well as tried to fix up the suit. I'm hoping the "X" keeps the focus up near the face area. Also attempted to fix the eye and mouth errors.
Thanks Loveless_Ari. Hopefully she is less cockeyed and looking more at the viewer now.
Last edited by syngeist; August 26th, 2010 at 10:09 PM.