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Hey guys, was wondering if you could critique this one. One of the areas I seem to be screwing up a lot is the the head region (among other parts); any opinion/input would be great! Thanks in advance
Last edited by rex-craft7; January 13th, 2010 at 06:34 AM. Reason: file too big
Be consistent in your style. The only thing that pops out as 'anime' to me right now are his eyes. It could be that you're simply not finished yet, but I just thought I'd point it out.
I second dpaint about the stare and light. A strong contrast could add a lot to the feel of the picture.
Wipe the head clean and start over Looks like you've been working and reworking the head and its confusing you. Proportions come first. You've picked a hard angle to put the head into perspective. Features like the nose and half way of the lips are going to be closer to the turning edge of the front of the face.
I suggest getting a mirror and LOOK at what your head is doing (how its connected to the spine, the shape of the top of the head at that angle)
Force yourself to ignore small details like the pupils until you've got the shapes down.
Get these down and we'll work the facial features later. I can do a paintover when I get home. Send me a PM to remind me if you want to.
I will definitely start over, this time, while actually using reference... Thanks for the suggestions! I'll keep everyones input in mind while I'm redrawing it and I'll post again later with the redraw
very helpful matsign; can't thank you enough - I'll be looking at your redraw as one of the references while I try this again
Just took a couple hours to do a redraw. Maybe I'm afraid, I don't know, but I was trying to push myself to add more value, but it looks pretty much the same contrast wise... Other than the fact that the guy now looks like he has down's syndrome, any input/opinion would be much appreciated!
Hey, its a big improvement over the last imo. The mouth is a little too far down from the nose and the lowest part of the chin should be aligned on the center line (its suggested with value that you've got it a bit to our right).
If you feel you're view is getting stale of him, flip your canvas horizontally if you're in photoshop. You'll be able to spot things you normally don't see.
He doesn't look like he has down syndrome! lol
To be honest, I'll just back up what Matsign said, he beat me to it. But to put it simple, everything from the nose upwards looks fine for now in terms of angle, shape and perspective. On the other hand, his filtrum (bit between nose and mouth) is way too long, being the first thing that shot out at me.
Plus..maybe its just the rough lines, but the neck looks quite thick. I think I know the shape youre trying to go for, but maybe it needs a bit of refining to set the face off effectively
I knew that flesh bit had a name >.< Good point Spikings about the neck. The area under the chin is a bit rough and undefined, some clean up will make that silhouette pop and become more readable.
It may be a stylistic opportunity for you rex to "exaggerate" that area/space and shorten the width the neck even more. I think often in anime/manga, shoujo-y bishonen necks are general longer than normal and smaller in diameter.