last sequential page is great. The composition is dynamic. Your other stuffs (that i can see, not all your images load, fyi.) are also great. You've improved, mate. Keep it up.
I'm a fan of that first very loose gesture in #152. I think you got a lot of good information in there
As for the sequential, I'd like to see a better overall page composition. Each panel has a decent dynamism, but it's much more successful to consider it as a whole as well. Maybe it will evolve when it's inked.
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One Last Ballad
By Itai Rosenbaum
Panel 1 - Wide-angle shot of a desert road. It is noon and the sun is high. Driving across the panel at a high speed is a red convertible. In the convertible sits KRIS, she’s young, in her mid-twenties. Her long, red hair blows behind her in the wind. She wears very “rocker”-ish clothes, a white t-shirt with the sleeves cut-off, tied at the mid-drift, low-cut ¾ jeans, with a pair of black All-Stars (though we can’t see that yet, as she sits in the car), maybe a brace on one of her arms, or possibly some tattoos, go crazy. She tops off the look with a white cowboy hat, shading her eyes. She also wears reflective, mirrored sunglasses.
Panel 2 - Close-up on the car’s engine hood, as something inside it breaks down and smoke begins to come out.
SFX (engine): BAM!
Panel 3 - KRIS is bent over the car’s engine, it is, quite evidentially, broken. The car is now blowing black smoke up into the sky.
Panel 4 - (A little note: for the next 3 panels I want to show the passage of time, so what we’re going to do is have the three panels side-by-side taking up the width of the page. The 3 panels show the car so that each panel show one third of the car, the first shows the engine hood, the second the dash-board and driver seat, and the third the back-seat and “butt” of the car.) KRIS is leaning on the hood of the car staring off-panel looking for cars in the distance, it is still noon and the sun is high.
Panel 5 - It’s dusk now, and the sky (and entire landscape) take on a red hue. KRIS is sitting in the driver’s seat, her feet up on the dashboard. She has one hand on the car’s stereo and is flipping through radio stations.
RADIO: REPORTS OF--krrzch--BIE’S “FEEL SO NUM--ktzzsh--JOINING ME IS DR. HEN--knnzshff--BUT YOU SEE, IT’S NOT ME, IT’S NOT MY FAMILY, IN YOU--tsssshkzz--
Panel 6 - It’s night-time, and KRIS is sleeping in the back-seat. A big white moon hangs in the dark sky, illuminating everything in an eerie bluish light.
Panel 7 - Morning again and KRIS stretches her arms, yawning.
Last edited by klortho; February 25th, 2011 at 12:19 PM.
wow, good drawings.
keep on working and post them