This is the first of my posts on this site and hopefully some criticism will help me improve. Please point out notes and comments as you please, I welcome them all.
Last edited by Marshall Stevens; May 17th, 2009 at 06:46 PM.
Well, I can't see any pictures?
my sketches here... http://conceptart.org/forums/showthread.php?t=92997
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I'm having trouble working with the site. I'm new, so I'll stuff up and running in time.
yes I did it! thank goodness. Radost, I had to drag and drop the title into the message to post it.
Nice big green hand........
The clockworksnail Experience- SKETCHBOOK!!!
Man, you did it, hehe. So where's them characters, daily sketches, breathtaking landscapes, film quality matte paintings and thrilling environments? Kidding, but do bring it on man!
So, comments for now, you asked for some
For a first piece, I think you did a good job on the hand, but you're not creating any distance in the scene (ground/angle). The frame and position of the hand make for an interesting composition, but your back ground leaves too much undone. The perspective of the factory/oven (whatstheword) is all wrong, it should be curved differently at the sides most of all. Even for a stylistic approach, the smoke is not doing what smoke would or how it can be stylized. Finally, the sky and sun don't add anything for atmosphere yet, nor does it ad anything to a more abstract piece yet. The size of the sun, position and the single colour or detail of the sky need attention.
So, choose your "medium/genre", focus on fundamental construction rather then detail when you do one of these again. But , get a tablet asap.
Last edited by Radost; May 27th, 2009 at 06:10 PM. Reason: hamburger
don't worry about that painting. It was just my first one on my stylus and was done in MS paint. I only needed it for a test to see if I could post. I do thank you for the comments, and I don't really care much for it either. My scanner is broken, so I'm going to work around that and get some good pencil and pen sketches in here.
I know I used too much brown, but i'll finish it soon
I must say that the quality over the computer moniter snap picture is quite bad but I think
that if you saw it you'd like the real thing. Damn the broken scanner
scanner is broken, these aren't the best of sketches, but they'll do until I get others plugged in. Radost, don't worry about being critical, feel free to. I love criticism, I don't get enough of it with my art where I live.
Soft hearted themes. I love 'em. Bring it.
I'd love to see you with varying lines weights with the same minimal approach is the
paint stuff above.
If you can digitally picture your work. It's just the same. I think. For me anyway.
[As long as it still contains the same feel of the original]
I had to blow it up to get just the picture, but it still gets the point across.
I am quite slow with a busy schedule on the outside world, but I have not forgotten thee my viewers. I shall post a majority of sketches quite soon.