need some tips,comments and critiques to improve my work..
Looks pretty awesome to me! What kind of feedback are you looking for?
Loving the robot designs--they're really sweet.
I'm questioning the placement of the background robot a little, though... it bothers me how close it is to the edge of the foreground figures. I'd either move it further away or have it be overlapped a little. Also, you could really push some more depth in the piece by having the space in the background go much deeper. More robots or further mountains. Something to increase the depth overall.
It's lookin' good, though. Keep it up!
i'm happy with the tips you gave to improve this image..i think i've got the whole idea how to make this image better..really appreciated it..thank you so much!!
sorry for the shitty redraw .
Overall your composition is way to linnear. Everything is leadin the eye straight off the page. While it isnt a horrible composition you could do better. Try and make some more dyamics that lead the eye around, like having the guy looking backwards at the mech.
Last edited by Muz; May 4th, 2009 at 09:47 AM.
Yeah, I can't tell what the story is here. Are they just out for some fun on the slopes? Because they all kind of look like they're on the same team.
If the snowmobile rider robot is trying to escape from the other robots, make him look like he's from a different "tribe" of robots, that way we can understand the story.
Nice job otherwise. And I agree with what has been said so far about the composition in general.
At least Icarus tried!
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Is it supposed to be a re-design of Mobile suit gundam? Those mechs really look like Hygoggs
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Anyway, I agree with muzzoid's comments about composition, except I think flipping it horizontally might be worth a try too.
The thumb got me excited.
You need to get some of the crispness of that snow in there, crumbs of flakes etc. Good movement would have fit what I felt. Going straight down a slope like that is rather boring. It's like a todler riding his first electric scooter. Some rhythm in that bot's action and all the effects from it would have added some real sensation and speed.
Also go for shiny metal, I would really whack that one getting as much of the ice effect from them as possible, cold steel and then stick a gilette label on it.
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