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hey everyone My name is Benjamin Widdowson and i am a senior illustration major at Savannah College of Art and Design. My dream is to be a concept artist or cover artist for Marvel comics. So i was hoping for some good crit. being that nobody in my classes seems to have the balls to say anything other than "hey man its really good, especially (insert generic art thing here)"
anyway here is my site. http://www.benjaminwiddowson.com
you will find the links to my portfolio and sketch pages on the right hand side
and here is the piece im working on right now.
Hmm, couple of things.
1) The girl's body needs a lot of work, particularly the proportions. She's got a huge head and the legs seem wrong. Also, try to get a little more rhythm going in the pose so it isn't so static. Loomis and Bridgman, my friend!
2) It's hard to tell what the big object is. It is a building? How big is it? Is it supposed to be in the background? if so, bring in some atmospheric perspective, the lines shouldn't be quite so sharp. If it's in the foreground and is something she's summoning, what is it? Define the forms more clearly. Also, if it's indeed a building, what is the girl gesturing to? Some big narrative problems here, so definitely try to make things clearer.
3) The difference in lighting, and the sharp edges, are making a bit too much of a clash between the ice (?) and the gloomy sky. Try bringing more atmosphere into the whole thing, unify the color scheme a bit.
4) Finally, try varying up the color scheme to make this pop. You're using a bit too much black and gray for the shadows.
Hope all that helps. I can kind of see where you're going with this, but just work on the clarity so that the audience gets it right the first time . And sorry to hear about the lack of constructive crits in your class, I know how frustrating/unhelpful that can be. You've definitely come to the right place- welcome!
I tried to fix the things you said, working on 3 layers made that difficult. (that was part of the assignment). I was thinking about adding a big snow spirit or something like she is a summoner, let me know what you think.
using all the recent critic ive gotten, I started a new work. same assignment, i just figured id start over. Well, here is what i came up with. I believe this is my strongest work so far.
While this is indeed better than your last attempt, there are still serious problems. The most obvious issues are your anatomy and figural form construction. You obviously have some knowledge of the figure, but your weaknesses show more than your strengths. For example, your abdominal shape is extremely simplified and unconvincing. Your hand construction also reflects a gap in your understanding (hands are hard... study more hands). Perhaps the most problematic is your head construction - If you look closely, because the nose is at an angle, it's actually off-center, to the right. The lips are small and look pasted onto her face as opposed to flowing properly with the form of the face.
Another issue is your consideration of light. It's a rather dark scene, and yet your figure is getting blasted by diffused light coming from nowhere. If it's a street lamp or something, there would probably be some cast shadows going on here. Let's consider the police car lights, though. Look up some police lights on google. You will find that there is actually a temperature shift in terms of light color, getting "hotter" towards the center of the light source - they don't just glow blue and red.
If you want to get better, you are going to need to study more.
Last edited by BenjaminWiddowson; March 6th, 2009 at 04:00 AM.