I've done this in PS, took me 5 hours maybe...Critique and advice would be appreciated.
Last edited by Grof Vladimir; November 26th, 2008 at 06:38 PM.
Atmosphere to add depth, perspective to fix the bridge.
Thx for the reply... I've tried to fix the bridge and replaced old building with the new one. I hope it's better.
Perspective on the new building's a bit wonky, and I kind of like the cooler atmosphere in the old one. It's a nice piece though, just try taking out some of the black so its not so flattened in places. Also, its hard to tell whether that's a waterfall or not, try to establish a drop somehow.
I like it. Has a nice feeling. The pine trees and castle especially. I might go so far as to suggest adding more trees somewhere. It feels a little asymmetrically heavy on the right hand side. Expanding the canvas to the left side and adding over there could help the overall piece.
I agree with Duman. It looks great; something about it is just very appealing. But it does seem unbalanced. All there is on the left side is the mountain, which doesn't really balance out the castle, bridge, trees, and stream.
I would suggest adding some trees or something into the foreground on the left side. This would balance it and give a better sense of depth.
Edit: I also agree with Chagan; I think the cooler atmosphere of the first one looks better.
Don't stab me, because I'm sure you worked quite hard, but I think I like the first building better. Plus the atmosphere I like a bit better too.
The one thing I found improved was the bridge, although, a wooden rope bridge may look nicer with a bit more of a droop in the center.
For perspective, you could extend the cliff in the foreground (the one holding the bridge) slightly to the right so that it does not appear like the bridge is connected so far to the edge. (If you get what I mean).
Aside from my picking at it, it's totally gorgeous.
I clicked on this thread basically because the thumbnail looked so lovely. ^^
Guys, thank u all for constructive crits and possitive comments! ... I think i 've made it fine now. Here's the final version(I'm rdy for crit gunfire!)
P.S. Old building was crappy i dont know why, i had to change it
Yeah, u are right about mountain, i was just experimenting. Gotta change it.
Updated "final" version
Thank u mate That was the feeling i wanted to accomplish, some remote and mystic place far in eastern Europe...
Wow, this image really improved from beginning to end, nice work.
CA Finished Work
CA Sketch Book
"I have transcended that phase in my intellectual growth where I discover humour in simple freakishness. What exists is real; therefore it is tragic, since whatever lives must die. Only fantasy, the vapors rising from sheer nonsense, can now excite my laughter." - Lord Pirmence of Castle Lutez
I still think you could really push the composition and story elements on the piece.
I like this but I think the trees on the left side look too much alike.
Perhaps not make the trees on the left have a such a steep decline? My eye keeps following that line out of the painting.
Something's bothering me about the two "blossoming"? trees on the hill. My eye keeps getting drawn away from the castle and resting on them. I like their design but they're following the incline of the hill so similarly and I find my focus fighting between the castle and the trees. Maybe you could have some of the leafs/blossoms break across that line created by the hill.
Other than that, The hill in the more recent version is starting to look a little too overworked/muddy and the edge of the hill in front of the castle is looking a little sharp/too white. It might make the castle look a little more grounded if it were less of a white edge. It might also help the muddiness if you dialed down the whiteness of the hill in front of the castle - but I might be wrong.
The only other thing that sticking out is the two really strong diagonals (or it could be just one long one, I guess): one starting from the pine trees on the top right and following the hill and the other created by the pine trees to the left of the castle, I would be great if you could break those up a little.
But even if you ignore all that, this is seriously an amazing piece, It's quite inspiring actually - all the more reason for it to be perfect! ^^
Yep, i see now about the forest decline and other stuff. I'll look into it and update this piece tomorrow.
Still feels like it is going uphill, but that is better.