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Hello, my name's Per and I live in Sweden. I've decided to show this image I made and ask for a few pointers. Any comments are welcome. The image you'll see is a speedy work of a trainrail & tunnel, kinda old and not in use.
Thanks for helping out!
Pippis, this is a good establishing angle to start with (still a fairly early stage so I can't say much yet). I think the proportions are off, the entrance looks too low for a train to fit in that tunnel (perhaps raise it or give it an arch).
the farther post looks like its falling... is it?
cause I see the cable snap; that makes it justifiable?
I think if you had something to show scale it might clear up a few things. The track segments need to be smaller? Put a person in there...that would help with scale and give you and everyone else a bit of a guideline as to how large things are. You really don't know how tall a electric pole is but most people are in the range of 5' to 6' tall.
I agree that scale needs to be established. I'd also throw some detail elements in there as well (barrels, crates, abanodoned machinery.. ect), use your set pieces to expand on the pictures story. This is such a powerful perspective, it begs for a stonger narrative.
I like your brush work and use of textures.
It took me a while to discern that the far pole is still standing but the near pole is laying across the tracks. The placement of the wires helped.. but the angle of the fallen pole is similar enough to the standing pole that I thought they were both standing but leaning in different directions.
I guess this is an electric train that runs on three rails? I'm used to seeing just two rails but I haven't traveled much and three rails may be a very common thing in some areas.
I agree that adding people (or perhaps a rusted out automobile) would help convey scale.