So I worked real hard on my submission for the ChoW, then I didn't realize that the sidebar was required. Upon finding out that my submission hadn't made it to the final poll I was upset, but then was excited to receive a critique on how to improve because I wasn't accepted. But then I was even more distraught to find out that I had made it, but just had poor reading skills and would receive no critique.
And so it is that I've decided to seek out your criticisms my fellow concept artists. And this time, with a proper submission. Thanks in advance for any critiques you might be able to offer. I have larger versions of the conceptual sketches on the most current page of my sketchbook if you'd like to see them...
the cast shadow on the ground could have light that is passing through the ribs hit it. the cervical vertebrae caught my attention, humans have flat wide neck bones and birds have long and not so wide.
for example: human
they look almost like a cross in between but too short for any versatile movement. what i mean is the bones are larger and the space is compressed. in terms of function and design, it maybe worth while to look into.
i like the velvet texture on the wings. was that intentional? it looks it. you have to show me how you did it some time.
Kinjark: Excellent! That's really helpful, actually. I really regret not doing some real skeletal studies to make it seem more convincing. I'll definitely try to really research what i'm working on before hand next time.
The velvet texture on the wings was really an accident. Or just poor execution on my part. It was my intention to make them seem membraneous and fleshy, with just light shining through to show their real color. I think that the piece as a whole might've been a little too dark. Perhaps having that slight edge that the wings seem to have makes them seem a little too thick for that.
your welcome, yeah it helps to look at nature for tips on function. maybe the wings are too opauqe for that effect. try letting the sillouette show underneath the wings of the body come through if thats what you want.
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hey sketcheth! my biggest beef with your pic is those blacks that are obstructing details everywhere! your studies are rly interesting, i think sacrificing a bit of the dramatic lighting in favor of a more detailed figure (which is more concept art-y) would benefit your character a lot
sweet man. but yea, too dark. cant make-out the profile and shape of the guy. either make the background a bit lighter to make his shape pop out, or add a rim-light from behind that will run along his profile, describing the shape.
kinjark: I'll definitely remember that next time I attempt something like this, thank you so much!
petitemistress: I can definitely understand where you're coming from. I guess I was hoping to create more of a illustration, than a design. Which isn't really what the weekly challenges are all about. Thank you, I'll definitely try to keep my purpose in mind next time!
codenothing: That's a really interesting suggestion, I really didn't do much except for some simple cool reflected light for this, I should definitely work more on timages with more than one strong light source. Thank you so much!