Critique on sketches for a project?
Hey folks, first post for critique, so forgive me if I put this in the wrong place.
I'm doing an art project for school, and the assignment is to "illustrate an object in the style of your choice."
I am doing the style of Tatsuya Ishida, whose work can be seen here (NSFW). I realize that he is a cartoonist, and so it might not be some people's cup of tea, that's alright, I understand. What I'm looking for is really some critique on my forms, which I have attached. The object, a mannequin drawn by Loomis, is also attached. Please note that I intend to use only the parts of the mannequin above the base of the spine, ie. no pelvis, but arms are included.
Any advice would be useful, and if I forgot anything, let me know that as well. Paint-overs to illustrate errors are welcome.